Feedback on Creative Writing

·       Do you know in how many ways can we start an essay/story?

·       Use STOAP (speech/dialogue; theme; opinion; action; proverb) to begin your story if you feel confused again.

·        Expert use of connectors needed as your text seems replete with and and and and…..

·        Put in more effort into understanding how you can split your text into paragraphs.

·        Submit your next essay in soft copy form. It will save us time.

·       Always remember to separate adjectives using a comma:

1.    A sturdy, angry looking, aged man came out of the car with an old revolver in his right hand….

·       Use comma after introductory words:

·         After some time, we decided to move to the nearest mall.

·         The next day, we preferred to stay at home.

·       On our way back home, we came across….

·       Quite surprisingly, Sami was not there.

·       At last, a car appeared from behind a mountain.

·        It’s good to see you’re endeavoring hard to incorporate vocabulary words; however, thrusting too many uncommonly used words would make your writings sound verbose.

Reading onwards with a vigilant eye is what the solution is. This will enable you to apply vocabulary words in a way that they all sound appealing.

·        You and some other boys are using dashes or commas to end their sentences, mind you.

The solution is practicing a few exercises focused on correct use of punctuation marks.

When do we use a semi colon (;)?

Example-1

Sami came out of his bed; he opened the door soundlessly; peered into the dark and then --- shrieked at the top of his lungs. There stood in front of him a humongous dinosaur looking happy to find his dinner that easily. 

Example-2 

The following faculty participated in the seminar:

Professor John, Oxford University; Professor Steve, Harvard University; Professor Michael, New Orleans University; Professor Sandeel, Punjab University; Professor Alexander, Cambridge University.   

• As for the content of your story, I've already given enough feedback on that in the class.

I am waiting for further summaries of the remaining chapters from that novel.